WHICH ONE

Product Names

These are my long, narrative product names. I have actually put a lot of time into figuring them out, and some feedback would be cool.

"The gum ball machine that sat lonely on Grandma's dusty dresser at Shady Acres nursing home, dispensing stale, powdery gum balls to stifled grandchildren, her unwilling visitors."

"The backscratcher that was used by the neighborhood kids on lazy summer afternoons to comb and pick through the long and tangled hair of the stray cat that lived under the gazeebo in the local park."

"The scale model of “Big Snow”, the largest chicken ever to have lived, that was perched on the refridgerator in the church kitchen, overlooking Wednesday night community potlucks."

Logo & Package

I'm bit worried this look too busy?
I'll love to get some comment.
Thank you!

YAY OR NAY

WHICH ONE DO YOU LIKE BETTER
OR

After last class, I revised my logo to make the M more legible and to make it look more mustache like. Any comments would be greatly appreciated.

Logo Revision / Sizing

Here is my final (post kerned) logo along with 2 ideas i had for the 826 logo itself.

Also, as discussed during group crits I have added a white background to the logo when placed on the packaging. However I am becoming concerned that when shrunk to the small size that the logo is required to go to on the front of the packages "826 BMORE" will become smeared and illegible. Does any one have any opinions on whether it would be ok to just take out 826 BMORE type (as below) on the 1 place on each package where it gets this small? The full lockup still appears larger on other parts of the package.

thanks!

The Little Shoppe of Grammar, Label Revisions

Here are some quick edits done after todays crit. The top set are the price hang tags, and the bottom set are the revised labels. I'm going to try printing on both enhanced matte paper, and an off white stock to make it feel more vintage.