Monday, April 19, 2010



copy feedback? This is the store description / statement.

2 comments:

  1. In the first sentence, the comma should be a semi-colon. "Infrastructural" is awkward, perhaps reword the second half of the "*"

    I'm super pumped to see it all!

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  2. I'd consider making the first sentence a question instead of a statement.

    "Crashing and burning? We're here to help!" And so forth.

    I think the disclaimer could be pushed even further to make it more ridiculous.

    I like the term "throw in the towel", maybe it should be a towel that you strap to your wrist so you can't throw it....with encouraging words printed on it!

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